Dread's Training; Attention, Summoner!

[Mod Geno]

Alright Dread, let's start off with something just a little bit... different. A lot of times, in roleplaying, you'll need to research something; either a location or a character, and insert them into your roleplay. You have to know enough about the things you put into your roleplay to convince your audience that you know what you're talking about, AND write something entertaining and engaging. Your assignment for this training thread:

Your assignment is to take one of your roleplay characters and place them into the universe of the League of Legends. Your character is going to be summoned into the very beginning of one of the 5 versus 5 games on the Summoner's Rift map. You are to describe your surroundings once you have been summoned, and those around you (you can choose who). It is up to you to decide how long your post needs to be, but remember that I'll be critiquing you and offering advice as you go. Research your subject, describe your surrounds and teammates, and, if you're looking for extra credit, do some dialogue.

Can't wait to see what you come up with.

~ G

[dread]

A group of five summoners stand in a vast plain of lush green grass and several rolling hills; the land is decorated with numerous large stones, the occasional large oak, and several stone turrets that depict one being or another. Various monster camps dot the land that lays between the Serpintine River, Freljord, and the Ironspore Mountains. Here in this remote land deep with in Valoran lies the greatest concentration of magical energy. One two sides of this land are a Nexus the objective in this days event. surrounding this these Nexi are inhibitors to surpress minions and a shop. Today in this event 10 summoners are gathered to choose their champions and fight to prove their strength their cunning and their strategic minds.

As the summoners choose from their vast selection of champions each with their own unique abilities and powers there is one summoner who chooses a champion unknown to the others. A champion who is new to the intricacies of the summoners and their tangled web. The champion was a deaf fellow with abilities hidden even himself. The summoner lets the gamble weigh in his mind before choosing to see what this champion is capable of. Similarly on the summoners enemy team they too have chosen their champions and watch as they spawn into Summoners Rift. The two teams were Red and Blue each teams name corresponding with each Nexus they were to guard.

On the Blue team were Brand the Burning Vengance, a being made entirely of magma and fire. A woman with a light purple skin called Soraka the Starchild. Nautilus the Titan of the deep, a man made of an Iron suit with piercing orange orbs for eyes. Galio the Sentinel's Sorrow, a gargoyle with a deceptive simpleton look that hides a sharp mind. And Aaron the Hammer a Deaf boy with a powerful punch as well as powerful beat.

On the opposing Red team stand Cho'Gath the Terror of the Void. A VoidBorn of unspeakable evil and terror with a mocking gentleman's tone that can appear when this beast chooses to torment its preys mind. Shyvana the Half-Dragon, a woman born of the union between man and dragon her beautiful appearance hiding the overwhelming power and savagery of a dragon. Draven the Glorious Executioner, a man who seeks glory and fame among the thrill of war. Zyra Rise of the Thorns, an ancient plant that now walks with a female humanoid body. and lastly Master Yi the Wuju Bladesman, A keeper of the ancient art of Wuju. These opposing forces will clash in battle as pawns in the leagues events. This day marks the first true trial of Aaron the Hammers days in the League of Legends.

[Mod Geno]

Alright, first things first, GRAMMAR.

I hate to be a GN about this, but grammar is very important to roleplay. Spelling, punctuation, sentence structure, and syntax are all very important. Perhaps an illustration:

The panda eats shoots and leaves.
This sentence tells me that a panda, both a noble and cuddly creature, sustains itself on bamboo shoots, and the leaves which grow upon them.

The panda eats, shoots, and leaves.
This viscous, brutish bear pulled a Dine-N-Dash after discharging a firearm.

As you can see, the simple addition or omission of punctuation can change a sentence's meaning dramatically. Not to say that you did something like this in your work, but as an example to remember the importance of correct marking. Your post included several "Titles and Honorifics", such as "Rise of The Thorns" for Zyra. Whenever you give titles for someone in addition to their name, separate them with a comma. In addition, several of your possessive nouns are missing their apostrophe. "This day marks the first true trial of Aaron the Hammer's days in the League of Legends." Aaron the Hammer is the possessive noun of (days). "These opposing forces will clash in battle as pawns in the league's events" Who's events? The League's events. See? You also add commas for lists of three or more items. "Today in this event 10 summoners are gathered to choose their champions and fight to prove their strength, their cunning, and their strategic minds." Lastly, remember to separate different "info pieces" in a sentence with commas as well. Shyvana, the Half-Dragon, a woman born of the union between man and dragon, her beautiful appearance hiding the overwhelming power and savagery of a dragon.

So now that the comma lesson is over, let me point out that you did a wonderful job laying out the characters for this introduction, as well as describing the world in which these characters reside.

Now, your next challenge; Fast-Forward to the "End-Game'. Describe the combat between each team as one team assaults their enemies' base. You can focus on a one-on-one, two-on-one, or full five-on-five teamfight! This challenge is all about combat! Remember that you can always "go back" in the timeline to describe key moments that have led to where you are now. Don't forget to describe a champion's abilities if they use them, and don't feel like you need to write down the damage. This is all about the feel of combat, so let the punches fly!

[dread]

The sun on Summoners Rift had begun to set and the time to end the event was nigh, three people on each team were killed and only four champions remain. Aaron, The Hammer was lucky enough to have taken a shine to the lumbering Nautilus, A though intimidating was also a very kind man. He longed for the life he was forced to leave behind, his wife's loving embrace and the jokes he would pass along with his friends. It was a life he wanted revenge for and a life that Aaron could understand, though Aaron could not hear Nautilus' pictures and gestures were enough to remind him of how isolated he was to everyone as well. The barrier of his deafness often made him feel alien in the world; alone, unwanted, and unloved. Aaron and Nautilus had hidden themselves behind a few large rocks having made it all the way to the nexus but were unable to move forward as the remaining two opponent were left to guard it by their lonesome. And no pairing could be worse than Cho'Gath and Shyvana.

They had purposely been left behind as a barrier in case Master Yi, Draven, and Zyra had fallen. Each champion met their demise through their plan of divide and conquer. Galio had been slain by Master Yi. Master Yi had been able to elude Galios attacks and waited until his energy had depleted before unleashing a fatal combo of attacks on the tired gargoyles body. Master Yi Began his assault with Highlander. an ability that enhances Yi's speed and making him immune to any possible slowing abilities or effects for a few seconds, and when your Yi a few seconds is all you need. After using the Highlander ability Yi had activated his Alpha strke ability one that he used when he hid in the shadows. From his place in the shadows he leapt across the battle field and began dealing out attacks on Galio who had managed to regenerate enough energy to attack with a Righteous Smite an ability that shot two concussive blasts towards Yi. proved futile with Yi's Highlander still in use. after a series of five consecutive hits the gargoyle fell with a mighty thud.

Yi's victory was short lived as Nautilus was able to sneak up on him using his Dredge Line ability. By flinging his anchor and letting it sink into Yi's Shoulder he was able to propel both of them towards each other resulting in a clean blow to Yi who was left in a daze. While Dazed Aaron was able to use his Partial ability, an ability that allowed his arms to become large warhammer heads which he swung at master Yi who was still dazed, until he was beaten as well. Preceding with caution Aaron and Nautilus had managed to escape battle with Draven and Zyra who had taken or been taken out by Soroka and Brand. To Aaron the specifics of those battles were unknown but he knew they were dead. Now as the only ones left all they had to do would be to defeat Cho'Gath and Shyvana to win.

Easier said than done. The battle began with a small distraction tactic one that would lure one of them away and take the other out. Nautilus offered to take on Cho'Gath as he was the best at taking damage. Aaron promptly declined this offer and instead purposed a frontal attack starting with an ability that would knock both opponents into a daze and allow them both to begin laying down attacks until the daze wore off avoid the opponents attacks and repeat. Nautilus was a bit skeptical of this idea but agreed anyway and began their attack by using his Depth Charge ability.

Depth Charge Is an ability that uses a shock wave to chase down the targeted opponent seeing as how Shyvana and Cho'Gath were standing back to back in the direction of Nautilus' ability, and the target was Shyvana the ability would charge through Cho'Gath knocking him into the air and dealing Shyvana a large amount of damage as well as knocking her into the air leaving both opponents in a daze. This plan worked fairly well as it allowed Aaron the chance to Use Nautilus as a spring board and take on Shyvana with his Partial ability attacking her twice before a third attack was used to send her crashing into the ground. She stayed dazed for a few moments before lunging at the falling Aaron.

She attacked using Flame Breath while remaining in her human form. A fire ball was launched at Aaron who was knocked back into a near by stone from the push of the fireball. Meanwhile Nautilus who had more abilities to choose from was able to use Dredge Line into Cho'Gath as both were in the air, When they made contact Cho'gath was hurled into the earth leaving a relatively small crater. Upon Nautilus landing on the ground Cho'gath used his Rupture ability. Rupture allowed the ground to erupt into spikes that were targeted at Nautilus relative location. Nautilus was unable to avoid the spike and was sent into the foliage of a tree from the spikes tossing him into the air.

Nautilus responded by lunging towards a small patch of earth beside Cho'Gath upon touching the ground he converted the energy from his lunge and turned it into a mighty swing that unleashed his Riptide ability. Riptide summoned 3 large waves from his area in the form of a triangle, the wave closest to Cho'Gath exploded and slowed down his response time enough for nautilus to swing his anchor outwards for another Dredge Line to finalize Cho'Gath's Fall. Aaron had been battling Shyvana in a series of blocks and dodges until Shyvana used her Twin bite ability succeeding in pulling a double hit combo and severely weakening Aaron. Knowing that Cho'Gath was defeated Nautilus came to Aaron's rescue by performing a Dredge Line to pull her away long enough to stun her while Aaron took the final blow and struck her cleanly thus succeeding in finishing the Leagues event. Aaron stood there brimming with pride that he held his own in his first day as a champion a smile from ear to ear as he looked at Nautilus who only returned the kindness with a firm pat on Aaron's shoulder.