[Weapon] Ren Makoto

[Ren Makoto]

MAIN USERNAME: Smashley

LOYALIST / FREELANCER / ROLEPLAY-ONLY: Roleplay-Only

--------------

CHARACTER NAME: Ren Tesami Makoto

RACE: Human

CLASS: Weapon

AGE: Fifteen

GENDER: Female

APPEARANCE: Ren Makoto stands at approximately five foot four inches tall and weighs around one-hundred- fifteen pounds, unless she hasn;t been eating for a period of time. She is thinner than most people, but that doesn't mean there are others thinner than her. Ren normally has a rather distant stare with her red eyes whenever she is looking towards someone, which shows her normally confused expression towards what is going on at the time. Other times when she does not have a distant stare she will normally be smiling at her friends or someone else, giving of her loving nature. Due to the fact that she likes to smile and shine and show who she is with her outward appearance, she normally keeps her hair nice and tidy keeping it braided all the way to its full length, leaving just a small bit at the end to make it look like a tail. She is also always making sure not a single hair is loose before the braiding. After her hair, she then aims to keep her qipao nice and tidy on her body, along with her white qipao with some red trimming, she wears brown pants that run loosely down the entire length of her legs. Along with keeping her hair and clothing in order she always keeps her black gloves (that stretch up halfway between her elbow and shoulders) up on her arms trying to hide two tattoos on her arms. The tattoos are in the shape of two crosses (on each arm) spinning around up her arms, on her right arm the cross's are white and on her left arm the cross's are red.

Ren has a rather lighter skin than most other people mostly because she prefers shaded areas and being inside to being somewhere in the sun. She has dark red eyes that seem to pierce into the person she is looking at to try and figure out what their mood is currently. She has a fairly small build compared to most people, which makes her faster than others as well.

- - -

CURRENT PARTNER(S): None, to be obtained through a RP Plot.

WEAPON FORM(S): Ren (weapon link) has two different types of weapon forms for herself. She is able to transform into two different styles of the same gun, one being her holy gun mode, which is used for longer ranges (normally at twenty meters or more away from an enemy) and better accuracy. In her holy gun mode the name of the game is distance, staying away from the target and hitting them with a barrage of attacks form further away, in this form she is weaker than her other form, due to this is mainly to stay out of range and deal damage while avoiding the enemy, in this form she fire spiritual essence in the form of white crosses. Her other form is her corruption form, which is a secondary ability listed below. (Being hit with one of the regular bullets from her main form would feel like being hit by an average punch from a fairly strong build of a person)

- - -

ABILITIES:
[Main Ability]
Ability Name: Divine Retribution
Type: Active/Resonance
Strength: Inept
Keywords: Half and half, crosses, ranged, soul, gun
Description: Ren keeps half of the left side of the current gun form she is in and then switches out the right half for whatever the other gun form is. Upon firing the next shot, two larger crosses will come out of the barrel, spinning and intertwining like the tattoos on her arms, eventually reaching the target and dealing a sizable amount of damage, depending on the distance from the target, damage will be lost for each meter away from the target, normal distance for full effect of damage is twenty meters, at twenty meters it deals 2x damage and then looses close to around .1x damage per each meter lost, but never goes below the original damage output.. (This ability may be used once per fight, or once per ten posts (if ten is not enough then give me a number that would be more valid for you please!))

[Secondary abilities]
Ability Name: Corruption mode
Type: Active/weapon form
Strength: Average
Keywords: Corruption, ranged, close range, dark, draining.
Description: In this form Ren is better used close up and personal, along with dealing more damage at a closer range (anywhere from five meters to twenty meters), the meister can then use a series of physical attacks as well to deal damage(such as getting into melee distance and dealing a kick or a punch or two). The downside to the corruption mode is she cannot stay in it for too long, otherwise she will begin to get weaker and weaker and eventually be no use at all in the current fight. In her corruption mode she fires spiritual essence in the form of red upside down crosses. (The draining works similar to Tsubaki's enchanted sword mode.) (Update:Can be used three times per a battle, lasting a total of three posts, then it takes five posts to recharge.) (With this form being more close range and deadly, it also deals 2x the damage of her regular form)

EQUIPMENT:None

MINIONS: None

VEHICLES: None

- - -

LOYALTY: Loyal to what intrigues her the most in what happens.

KEY ATTRIBUTES:
Strengths: Speed, sense of hearing.
Weakness: Low pain threshold, low stamina, and physically (in human form) fragile.

PERSONALITY: Ren is normally confused to what people are telling her, or asking her. She will most likely just nod and look dumbfounded when she is having a conversation with someone, unless she understands the conversation, then she will be nodding and smiling for the most part. Other than being confused at people, Ren is normally a rather quiet person, minding her own place and keeping her nose out of other peoples business. Normally Ren will try and find a friend or two to stay with, to keep herself out of trouble and to just not be alone.

HISTORY: Ren's life was fairly normal, at least at the beginning of it anyways. She was born into a family of weapons that had no experience what so ever and didn't plan on going to DWMA. As Ren continued on she quickly learned that she wouldn't have an easy life with her family, every time she would slip up or make a mistake she was to be punished, either mentally or physically. After years and years of the abuse from her parents she was disciplined, she learned to be loyal, honest, respectful and so forth.

After finishing with her punishment at every turn, she then had to face her elder siblings, who despised her for being a different type of weapon in the family, they were all closer range weapons than her and dealt a lot more damage than her as well. Soon she began to be bullied by them as well, which would normally end in blood stains on her clothes, and of course her parents would punish her for ruining a perfectly good qipao.

Eventually Ren was so mentally broken and physically weak that she couldn't face anyone anymore, she would stay in her room for hours on end, sitting in the corner with her head on her knees, praying that she would get out of that house alive. Luckily one day her wish came true, the family had decided to go to the market place together and there she knew they would not hurt her in a public place. They made it to the market place and foolishly her parents and siblings weren't watching her and she quickly slipped away and ran for her life.

Ren ran for what seemed like hours on end before making it alone and away from the town she grew up in. Quickly she ditched her previous clothes and hair style and went with a look that she though suited herself. She then would hitch-hike all the way to a town that she could be away from her parents in. She eagerly continued on with her walking when no one else would take her anywhere else and eventually made it to the town. Upon entering the town she was greeted by a nice family that would eventually take her in and adopt her into her family.


MORE INFO: Zero souls.

[Eva]

O1. Try to describe her height and weight so other people can get a more definite idea of what your character looks like. If she's short, just how short? If she's thin, how thin? etc.

O2.Corruption mode needs to be made into its own separate ability.

O3. Main ability: How often can this ability be used? (every ___ posts? ____ times per battle?) How much more damage does this shot deal compared to her ordinary shots? Try to give a sense of the magnitude of damage this causes, or else people fighting you will have no idea how badly they're supposed to be hurt by this.

O4. Strengths: What do you mean that pressure points are a strength? Is she trained in knowing how pressure points work? What is the extent of what she can do with that knowledge?

O5. Weaknesses:About being mentally fragile, it is definitely going to come in play when it comes to how susceptible she will be to falling to Madness in the plot that you and your partner are planning, though for now unless she is currently vulnerable to Madness and demonstrates this by being able to triggered into a temporary madness state, you need to come up with another weakness. Remember that weaknesses need to be a constant hindrance to performance in every battle, all throughout the battle. If it's something that won't be present every time, then it doesn't count. Here's a list of commonly used weaknesses as a starter.

[Ren Makoto]

Modified, I got everything you said, hopefully now it is good enough.

[Eva]

O1. Divine Retribution: you still need to specify what you mean by "sizeable amount of damage."

O2. Corruption Form: Since this ability is meant to be draining and weakens the weapon over time, it would make more sense if the use limit was something like _______ times per battle. In this case, three times per battle, lasts for three posts, must wait 5 posts after the last time it was used to be used again.

Also, you need to be more specific on how it's more effective in short-range. What counts as short-range? (Within how many feet/meters?)

Plus, what did you mean by "the meister can then use a series of physical attacks as well to deal damage"? Is this just to say that the weapon can be used as a blunt melee object?

O3. Admin Roc or Mod Geno will give final judgment on your Pressure Points ability.

[Rocton]

To be quite honest, I'm getting tired of this pressure points thing. if all you're wanting to do is have a character that can have medical value i don't see why you can't have a character that is merely "knowledge of body structure" or other crucial elements. Why everyone always resorts to the Naruto chakra stuff is beyond me and don't take this the wrong way you've done nothing wrong but this is literally around the 4th time someone has tried this, and out of those 4 people I'm willing to bet my right soccer leg that none of them had any knowledge about how blood veins and pressure points actually work. (The worst one was by far was one who was trying to relate soul wavelengths to pressure points and was trying to say with knowledge of them he could block of resonances and such)

So I'm just gonna go out and say it right now. Unless i see characters who are based completely around the idea of this "pressure points" idea, I'm just shutting it down altogether. The only thing I'm seeing as being wanted from all these is the ability to go "OH I TOUCHED YOU, YOU"RE DEAD" or "I TOUCHED YOU, YOU"RE ALL BETTER!"

that being said, i will suggest if you still want to keep something along those lines than feel free to make a character with some medical experience. Then you can actually look up organs and such and have some degree of legitimacy to all your wishes. It'd accomplish the same thing, being able to help allies and know where to strike opponents and ease my concerns that people aren't going around killing other characters with stuff like this

[Ren Makoto]

Modified again, took our pressure points and added a different strength to replace it.

[Eva]

APPROVED